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Skyrim Poem - Rikka - 07-06-2016
I wrote a poem about skyrim a while ago, found it on my google drive so thought i'd share it.
Leave feedback if you want to
Whiterun
Nords for generations to come,
when ancient stories they sit and tell,
will ’round the hearth-fire recount the tale
of the day that Whiterun fell.
The great walled city stood untouched
by foe from far afield.
In Dragonsreach the Jarl did sit,
his city as his shield.
Then Ulfric, of the Stormcloak line,
sent a message to Whiterun’s hall.
In silent words the message spoke,
“Side with me or fall.”
Balgruff sought to guard his keep,
to save his city from harm,
and so he sent a message back,
and formed up his men-at-arms.
The Whiterun forces held the walls
and barricaded roads.
The Stormcloaks made ballistas ready
to fire devastating loads.
Down came the barricades
the city streets ran red.
Mailed boot steps trampled over
the dying and the dead.
The Stormcloaks took the hold and keep,
though struck not the Jarl down,
but offered his seat to one more loyal
to Ulfric and his Jagged Crown.
Now times have changed and years gone by,
the world not as it was.
But still all Nords remember clear
the Stormcloaks and their cause.
And above all else they do recall
and on this memory dwell:
the day that Nord fought Nord for land,
the day that Whiterun fell…
RE: Skyrim Poem - Zephyrus - 07-06-2016
The first stanza sounds like it would fit with Attack on Titan if you changed the names, haha.
Not bad though, not bad at all
RE: Skyrim Poem - Rikka - 07-06-2016
(07-06-2016, 10:56 PM)Zephyrus Wrote: The first stanza sounds like it would fit with Attack on Titan if you changed the names, haha.
Not bad though, not bad at all
I guess haha.
Thank you!
RE: Skyrim Poem - Jebusfathead - 07-06-2016
Was I the only one reading this as if a Skyrim bard was singing it?
RE: Skyrim Poem - Rikka - 07-06-2016
(07-06-2016, 10:59 PM)Jebusfathead Wrote: Was I the only one reading this as if a Skyrim bard was singing it?
I don't think so :c
RE: Skyrim Poem - Silence - 07-07-2016
Don't use the commas excessively, if you're going to go with a "rhyme scheme", keep it. If you don't, you're drifting into free-verse, but if you're using a half rhyming and half not, it looks sloppy.
It's a good poem but don't try to force it.
RE: Skyrim Poem - Zaiken - 07-07-2016
Seems good but I haven't played skyrim in so long I forgot what everything is.
RE: Skyrim Poem - Rikka - 07-07-2016
(07-07-2016, 12:10 AM)Silence Wrote: Don't use the commas excessively, if you're going to go with a "rhyme scheme", keep it. If you don't, you're drifting into free-verse, but if you're using a half rhyming and half not, it looks sloppy.
It's a good poem but don't try to force it.
Yeah, im pretty much a noob at poems & english in general, but thanks for the feedback. I will keep that in mind!
(07-07-2016, 12:19 AM)Mini Para Wrote: Seems good but I haven't played skyrim in so long I forgot what everything is.
Thank you, its the battle of whiterun xD