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RE: Feedback on my Descriptive Writing? - Cressi - 08-30-2014
Neat writing; it's got just the right amount of feelings put into it to make one think a bit further when done reading. In descriptive writing, the most important part is to catch the reader at an early stage, and make sure they find it interesting for long enough to stay with it. In this, you have no errors ^^
I actually wrote a discussion on that very quote, and it's brilliant in your context ^^
"Educating the mind without educating the heart is no education at all"
It's indeed very well written, and I'm not sure I could've done it better myself ^^
Spoiler:
I love your signature quote.
RE: Feedback on my Descriptive Writing? - Eclipse - 08-30-2014
(08-30-2014, 09:22 AM)Cressi Wrote: Neat writing; it's got just the right amount of feelings put into it to make one think a bit further when done reading. In descriptive writing, the most important part is to catch the reader at an early stage, and make sure they find it interesting for long enough to stay with it. In this, you have no errors ^^
I actually wrote a discussion on that very quote, and it's brilliant in your context ^^
"Educating the mind without educating the heart is no education at all"
It's indeed very well written, and I'm not sure I could've done it better myself ^^
Spoiler:
I love your signature quote.
Thank you for the awesome feedback! I'm glad you liked it. I only hope my teacher feels the same.
I'd love to read it! This particular quote I came across while managing Aspire.
Spoiler:
Thanks <3
RE: Feedback on my Descriptive Writing? - Cressi - 08-31-2014
(08-30-2014, 10:18 AM)Eclipse Wrote: Thank you for the awesome feedback! I'm glad you liked it. I only hope my teacher feels the same.
I'd love to read it! This particular quote I came across while managing Aspire.
Spoiler:
Thanks <3
I'm sure your teacher will ^^
I'll see if I can find it somewhere ^^